Rune
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Post by Rune on Sept 20, 2005 19:55:10 GMT -5
Just to be the Devil's Advocate...
*Post*
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Lone Assassin
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I have traveled the world searching, but I still search for my Destiny
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Post by Lone Assassin on Sept 21, 2005 8:13:47 GMT -5
Now, hark Thanatos. I fixed the hair and dropped the tonfa and sectional staffs. Also, I'm a tad more specific on how much I really have.
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Rune
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Post by Rune on Sept 21, 2005 15:09:16 GMT -5
If you'd listen to every single person on this site, or if you bothered to harken unto Thanatos and read the compilation, you'd realize that you can't have a laptop.
I mean, really. A laptop? Do you know what site you're at?
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Post by Nicholi on Sept 23, 2005 16:57:28 GMT -5
Alright, now you're getting somewhere. The only problems tat really strike me are the following:
THERE ARE NO AEGISITE MINES. The majority of Aegisite on Xenon lies in the Ruined City, which is a place most people avoid, which means that your chances of having obtained Aegisite from there is slim to none. The only other large quantity of Aegisite is that in the Possession of Nicholi Anhelo.
The Stun Gun Flashlight is a no.
The red eye thing is very cliched. Pick a normal eye color.
Giving yourself a large amount of money is rather stupid. Having a lot of money doesn't really mean anything here so drop that.
Your story is still rather stupid in certain areas but I'm not to concerned there.
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Lone Assassin
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I have traveled the world searching, but I still search for my Destiny
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Post by Lone Assassin on Sept 24, 2005 5:13:02 GMT -5
No, In real life my right eye has a red dot in it. It is not unrealistic. Give me your E-mail and I'll show you .
As for the light, I'll change it to a flashlight but I'm trying to go for a small device with an electric current too (any suggestions anyone).
Before I change the story, is the ruined city in the desert (Thanatos crossing one to get there)?
For money, why did I even mention that in the first place???
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Dimitri
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Listen to the wind blow, Down comes the night. Break the silence, d**n the dark, d**n the light...
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Post by Dimitri on Sept 24, 2005 9:12:49 GMT -5
No, In real life my right eye has a red dot in it. It is not unrealistic. Give me your E-mail and I'll show you . Bull crap. It's called photo red-eye.
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Lone Assassin
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I have traveled the world searching, but I still search for my Destiny
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Post by Lone Assassin on Sept 24, 2005 11:16:54 GMT -5
O-kay. Fine. I'll show you in person.
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Post by Whitakker on Sept 25, 2005 13:44:42 GMT -5
Or, you could just have a normal eye color like...I don't know, NORMAL PEOPLE WOULD!
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Post by Saprespade on Sept 30, 2005 15:02:35 GMT -5
hello lone assassin if your own talk to me
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Rune
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Post by Rune on Sept 30, 2005 15:35:50 GMT -5
*IF* *YOU'RE* "ON*, not if your own. Since your is possessive and own is possessive, and since you used them redundantly, and since the universe frowns upon you, and since you're talking to Lone Assassin... you're gay. Hah.
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Post by Whitakker on Sept 30, 2005 16:39:39 GMT -5
Seriously, LA is the last person you would want to talk to here.
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Warden
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"You are free to sever the chains of Fate that bind you."
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Post by Warden on Oct 3, 2005 8:01:51 GMT -5
Okay, you have fixed up a lot on this charecter sheet, but you still need to fix some more.
1.I know you have the red dot in your eye in real life, but you need to get rid of it. 2. You have to much equipment. You really do not need all of that stuff.
Thats all i see right now, so you might want to fix it now before you make someone more angry at you.
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Fayth
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They kill the old and leave the young to suffer.
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Post by Fayth on Oct 7, 2005 21:39:04 GMT -5
Hello Lovely Newby,
#1) Being a ninja/ Samiri?(maybe spelled like this, maybe not) can not be allowed to newbies. Because we have enough Sinjas for this place.
#2) Yea, your character is pretty...dumb. I am sorry it is so common, take a step outside the box and THINK SO SOMETHING NEW, my love.
#3) Yea....Yea...You stand there in the corner and think about what you have done Mister and don't come out until you apologize.
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Arlen
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SOMETIMES DEATH COMES QUICKLY SOMETIMES DEATH COMES SLOWLY NEVERTHELESS IT COMES...
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Post by Arlen on Oct 13, 2005 12:29:09 GMT -5
Heres a suggestion for the flash light carry a batterie around with you and whenever you need light stick it up your A** and maybe it'll shine through your eyes! for an electric current carry a copper wire and wrap it around it.
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Dimitri
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Listen to the wind blow, Down comes the night. Break the silence, d**n the dark, d**n the light...
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Post by Dimitri on Oct 13, 2005 19:34:09 GMT -5
*IF* *YOU'RE* "ON*, not if your own. Since your is possessive and own is possessive, and since you used them redundantly, and since the universe frowns upon you, and since you're talking to Lone Assassin... you're gay. Hah. What brilliant logic! It's like a Catch 22!
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