Character sheet: Kyo

[kyo]

Name:Kyo
Age: 25
Weapons: he uses a strange acrobatic style of martial arts, it was made him to kill instianly, or to kill very slow depending on his mood at the time
Family: none, his mother died giving birth and his father, well lets just say he is unknown
Height: 5'11
Weight: 150
Eyes: crimson
Hair: ragged and long, brownish orange
Skin: what little is visible is very pale white due to lack of exposure to the sun
Clothing: A ragged old straight-jacket, with the buckel that binds his arms broken years ago. He has been wearing this thing since he was about 18.
Equipment: He uses what ever he finds lying around
Occupation: none, he is just a drifter
Bio: His mother once worked in a mental ward, while working there she was attacked and rapped by 50 different maniacs, locked up in this ward. A few months after this avent his found out she was pregnent and tried to kill herself many times, she finally got her wish of dieing the day Kyo was born. As Kyo grew so did his insanity, he was sent to the same ward his mother worked at, when he was only 7, after he beat to death 5 other children. He escaped the ward when he was 12, by this time he had already killed 20 other people in the ward. He was caught again when he was 18, and he escaped again when he was 20 and has been free ever since. His body count as of now is 200 victims.

[Dimitri]

Very good. A very dark character. I guess someone will screen you soon. I can't remember who's turn it is.

[kyo]

Well, I just thought I would make a dark, evil character becuase from what I heard and read on this site this would be the first character of this type on here.

[Whitakker]

A homicidal maniac, huh? Ya' just can't have too many of those these days...j/k lol. I think it's really neat.

[Hanzo]

Your character sounds really strange, but also cool. Welcome to the site!!

[Hanson Crawford]

Not to sound to Dorthy-ish, but.... Are you a good guy, or a bad guy? I mean, I did put up that post about new characters being villians, but I didn't really think anyone would take it seriously.... But it'd be odd, working with a homocidal maniac, but it would prove interesting.

Just thought I'd ask.

[Thanatos]

I have some real issues with this character.

Don't get me wrong--I'm hardly an ethics-mongering goody two shoes. I appreciate large doses of mindless violence as much as the next bloke, topped with a healthy helping of blood and gore. It's not the dark nature or disturbing imagery in this character sheet that bothers me, but rather the manner in which it is presented.

First and foremost, Kyo's motive for slaying two-hundred victims is not touched upon at all--if such a character were to possibly exist, there is no way he could be trusted or indeed interacted with at all. He would be simply too dangerous and unpredictable, slaying without the slightest notice. Unless you intend to indefinitely remain in your own isolated thread, this will require some heavy revision.

The backstory surrounding Kyo's birth is also somewhat suspect. Supposedly Kyo's mother was raped by fifty mental ward inmates, yet every last one of them let her live. This doesn't seem particularly believable, as surely such a horrific event would end in the death of the poor woman involved.

Lastly, such facilities as described in Kyo's biography cannot exist on the large scale in the First Continent. The First Continent is by nature divided and relatively primitive; certainly some kingdoms and provinces have begun to lock up their more dangerous deviants, but not nearly on the scale you have described.

(Perhaps I'm being too critical, but I've finally been granted momentary access to a computer, and I have to get back in practice.)